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the graph shows the percentage of visiting the cinema once a month or more between 1984 to 2003 (4 age group)

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The graph illustrates the many of visitors in 4 age group go to the cinema once a month or more from 1984 to 2003. Overall, it is immediately evident that visiting the cinema became increasingly popular among all age groups. Furthermore, the percentage of people aged 15-to-24-year-olds increased the most while the figure for 35 and cover had a sightly increase which is the lowest percentage throughout the graph. Notably, young adults between 15-24 were the most likely to visit the cinema at least once a month had reached 56%, up 43% from 2003.

The graph illustrates the This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 of visitors in 4 age group go to the cinema once a month or more from 1984 to 2003.

Overall
, it is immediately evident that visiting the cinema became increasingly
 popular among all age groups. Furthermore
, the percentage of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 aged 15-to-24-year-olds increased the most while the figure for 35 and cover had a You used an adverb ('sightly') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
sightly increase
 which is the lowest percentage throughout the graph.

Notably
, young adults between 15-24 were the most likely to visit the cinema at least once a month had reached 56%, up 43% from 2003. 