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The graph shows the percentage of female members of Parliament in European countries between 2000 and 2012. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the percentage of female members of Parliament in European countries between 2000 and 2012. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main features and making comparisons where relevant. d9eMr
The given line chart illustrates the proportion of woman representatives of Parliament in 5 European nations (Germany, Italy, France, UK, Belgium) from 2000 to 2012. Overview, it can be seen that UK was the country with the lowest rate of female in 2000, whereas in 2012, Italy was the highest percentage of woman to take part in court. Specifically, Germany, Italy, France and UK were the increased overarching trends. In 2000, the proportion of woman members in UK was under 5% and it rose dramatically from 2004 to 2012 with nearly 10% to 22% respectively. In France and Germany, it accelerated slightly and steadily from 25% to roughly 32% in France and from 34% to 37% in Germany between 2000 to 2012. In Italy, the rate of female members of parliament was the second percentage and lower than Germany in 2000. It abruptly surged in eight successive years from 2004 to 2012 and was the country with highest rate in 2012. In Belgium, the proportion of woman representatives was the only decreased trends. It jumped from 16% in 2000 to 23% in 2004 and remained stable in five successive years from 23% to 24%. After that, it dropped in 2012 with 23%.
The
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line chart illustrates the proportion of
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woman
representatives of Parliament in 5 European nations (Germany, Italy, France, UK, Belgium) from 2000 to 2012.

Overview, it can be
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seen
that UK was the country with the lowest rate of female in 2000, whereas in 2012, Italy was the highest percentage of
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woman
to
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take part
in court.

Specifically
, Germany, Italy, France and UK were the increased overarching trends. In 2000, the proportion of
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woman
members in UK was under 5% and it rose
dramatically
from 2004 to 2012 with
nearly
10% to 22%
respectively
. In France and Germany, it accelerated
slightly
and
steadily
from 25% to roughly 32% in France and from 34% to 37% in Germany
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between 2000 to 2012
.
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In
Italy, the rate of female members of parliament was the second percentage and lower than Germany in 2000. It
abruptly
surged in eight successive years from 2004 to 2012 and was the country with
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highest
rate in 2012.

In Belgium, the proportion of
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woman
representatives was the
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only
decreased trends. It jumped from 16% in 2000 to 23% in 2004 and remained stable in five successive years from 23% to 24%. After that, it dropped in 2012 with 23%.
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IELTS academic The graph shows the percentage of female members of Parliament in European countries between 2000 and 2012. Write a report of at least 150 words summarizing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

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