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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the amount of people visited for four different museum between the year 1980 and year 2015. Overall, thé louver showed the most popular museum for the total period of time. It is clear that, Both Vatican and lover museums reported increasing amount of visitors during this 35 years. However, the amount of people who visited Vatican significantly increased up to around 95 million from around 5 million. According to the graph during 1990 and 1995 the lover museum showed the less popular compair to other years. In addition, bothlondon science museum and Shenzhen museum reported the lowest number of visitors during the period. The most significant decline showed by tplondon science museum. Four million of museum visitors dropped rapidly up to around 2 million after 1985. However museum of Shenzhen became popular after year 2000. The lowest amount of sharp 3 million rose up to 3. 9 million in 2015.
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that, Both Vatican and lover
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reported increasing
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from around 5
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. According to the graph during 1990 and 1995 the lover
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the less popular
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and Shenzhen
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reported the lowest number of visitors during the period. The most significant decline
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. Four
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visitors dropped
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of Shenzhen became popular after
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2000. The lowest
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rose up to 3. 9
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IELTS academic The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

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