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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Nr82g
This graph depicts the amount of visitors to four multiracial museums 1980 to 2015. Overall, the Vatican museum has always been growing for all time. Although the Louvre museum has decreased from 1995 to 2000. Then it shows an increase for ten years. Whereas Shenzhen and London science museum was approximately in their number of visitors and they were at the same level for ten years from 1990 to 2000. In 2015, others from the London science museum have scaled up. Even though the London science museum was sustainable for 5 years at 4 point. Then the amount of customers fell from 4 to 2. While this process continued, Shenzhen museum, 1990 to 2000, reached a similar level like the London museum and soon Shenzhen showed surplus. But the Louvre museum fluctuated until 2000 and it’s lowest level was approximately 8. In that case the lowest level was 2 millions whereas the highest level was about also around 10 millions. While Shenzhen grew up, the gap formatted 2 million people between Shenzhen and the London science museum.
This graph depicts the amount of visitors to four multiracial
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museums
1980 to 2015.

Overall
, the Vatican
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museum
has always been growing for all time.
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Although
the Louvre
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museum
has decreased from 1995 to 2000. Then it
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shows
an increase for ten years. Whereas Shenzhen and London
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science
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museum
was approximately in their number of
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visitors and
they were at the same
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level
for ten years from 1990 to 2000.

In 2015, others from the London
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science
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museum
have scaled up.
Even though
the London
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science
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museum
was sustainable for 5 years at 4 point. Then the amount of customers
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fell
from 4 to 2. While this process continued, Shenzhen
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museum
, 1990 to 2000, reached a similar
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level
like the London
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museum
and
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soon
Shenzhen
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showed
surplus.
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But
the Louvre
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museum
fluctuated until 2000 and it’s lowest
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level
was approximately 8.

In that case
the lowest
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level
was 2 millions whereas the highest
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level
was about
also
around 10 millions. While Shenzhen grew up, the gap formatted 2 million
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people
between Shenzhen and the London
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science
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museum
.
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IELTS academic The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

Academic
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4 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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