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The graph shows the number of USA labor force employment, 1930-2010

The graph shows the number of USA labor force employment, 1930-2010 MB07k
The line graph illustrates the American labor force employment for five different sectors from 1930 to 2010. Overall, the Farming, Fishing, and Foresting sectors are at the peak at the beginning of 1930. However, it is declined significantly by the end of the period. Meanwhile, the Industrial sector is increased significantly starting from 1970 to 1990 before remaining steady for the rest of the years. Furthermore, the other sectors are fluctuating over the given periods. In 1930 the number of farming, fishing, and forests peaked at around 70% of the total number of labor force employment. However, at the end of 2010, those sectors have become the least. In contrast, the industrial sector starting from the very bottom can experience an increase and become the most significant influence, at around 40% of the total employment rate. Technical, sales and office, and other services are fluctuating for the given period. Technical at the end of 2010 reach around 30 %. Sales and office, and other services are become the third and fourth with around 20% and 10% respectively.
The line graph illustrates the American labor force employment for five
different
sectors
from 1930 to 2010.

Overall
, the Farming, Fishing, and Foresting
sectors
are at the peak at the beginning of 1930.
However
, it
is declined
significantly
by the
end
of the period. Meanwhile, the Industrial
sector
is increased
significantly
starting from 1970 to 1990
before
remaining steady for the rest of the years.
Furthermore
, the other
sectors
are fluctuating over the
given
periods.

In 1930 the number of farming, fishing, and forests peaked at
around
70% of the total number of labor force employment.
However
, at the
end
of 2010, those
sectors
have become the least.
In contrast
, the industrial
sector
starting from the
very
bottom can experience an increase and become the most significant influence, at
around
40% of the total employment rate.

Technical, sales and office, and other services are fluctuating for the
given
period. Technical at the
end
of 2010 reach
around
30 %. Sales and office, and other services
are become
the third and fourth with
around
20% and 10%
respectively
.
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