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The given map shows several changes occurred in a shopping centre

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The given map shows how was shopping centre was developed over a time period of 30 years. Overall there have been several changes that took place in the shopping centre between the year of 1982 and 2012To begin with in 1982 there was a coffee shop in North West side of the shopping centre which was replaced by sports Store. Also there was a leak in front of the entrance of shopping centre in 1982 which was removed and furniture retail shop was set up there in 2012. The entertainment area was remained on the same place. In the Southwest direction of the shopping centre a parking lot was built in the year of 2012. In addition to it in the north side of shopping centre there was a food store in 1982 which was converted into electronics store. There were certain things that remained at the same place such as entrance of shopping centre toilets and elevator for the next 30 years. On the right side of shopping centre there were three stores such as sports store electronic store and furniture store which were converted into themed restaurants and food store.
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over a time period of 30 years.
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there have been several
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changes
that took place in the
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of 1982 and 2012To
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with in 1982 there was a coffee shop in North West side of the
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centre
which
was replaced
by sports
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Store
.
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Also
there was a leak in front of the entrance of
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shopping
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centre
in 1982 which
was removed
and furniture retail shop
was set
up there in 2012. The entertainment area
was remained
on the same place. In the Southwest direction of the
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a parking lot
was built
in the
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year
of 2012.
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to it in the north side of
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shopping
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centre
there was a food
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store
in 1982 which
was converted
into electronics
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store
. There were certain things that remained at the same place such as entrance of
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shopping
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centre
toilets and elevator for the
next
30 years. On the right side of
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centre
there were three
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such as sports
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store
electronic
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store
and furniture
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store
which
were converted
into themed restaurants and food
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IELTS academic The given map shows several changes occurred in a shopping centre

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