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The graph shows the information about the adult education based on a survey.

The graph shows the information about the adult education based on a survey. GMnWQ
The graph shows the information about the adult education based on a survey. The bar chart illustrate why people go for studying and the pie chart shows how this cost should be shared. Overall, around 40 percent people start studying because they fell interested in the subject and for getting the qualifications and most of the cases the cost should be taken care by the individuals who is studying. Mostly, people enroll in adult education because of their own interest. Around 38-40 percent people get involved in adult education to earn the qualification or out of interest to the subject. Twenty percent people think that this education might be helpful for their current job. Twenty percent people take the course to increase the chance of the promotion while other twenty percent just enjoy learning. The cost should be shared by the individuals who is taking the course. If the government can share the course fee to the taxpayers, then this might be helpful to the adults and the rest amount can be shared to the employer as well.
The graph
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the information about the adult
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education
based on a survey. The bar chart illustrate why
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people
go for studying and the pie chart
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shows
how this cost should
be shared
.

Overall
, around 40
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percent
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people
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start
studying
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because
they fell interested in the subject and for getting the qualifications and most of the cases the cost should
be taken
care by the individuals who
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is
studying.

Mostly
,
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people
enroll in adult
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education
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because
of their
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own
interest. Around 38-40
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percent
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people
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get
involved in adult
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education
to earn the qualification or out of interest to the subject. Twenty
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percent
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people
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think
that this
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education
might be helpful for their
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current
job. Twenty
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percent
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people
take the course to increase the chance of the promotion while other twenty
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percent
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just
enjoy learning.

The cost should
be shared
by the individuals who
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is
taking the course. If the
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government
can share the course fee to the taxpayers, then this might be helpful to the
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adults
and the rest amount can
be shared
to the employer
as well
.

IELTS academic The graph shows the information about the adult education based on a survey.

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4 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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