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The graph shows the fluctuation in the number of people at a London underground station over the course of a day.

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The graph shows the fluctuation in the number of people at a London underground station over the course of a day. The busiest time of the day is in the morning. There is a sharp increase between 06: 00 and 08: 00, with 400 people using the station at 8 o'clock. After this the numbers drop quickly to less than 200 at 10 o'clock. Between 11 am and 3 pm the number rises, with a plateau of just under 300 people using the station. In the afternoon, numbers decline, with less than 100 using the station at 4 pm. There is then a rapid rise to a peak of 380 at 6pm. After 7 pm, numbers fall significantly, with only a slight increase again at 8pm, tailing off after 9 pm. Overall, the graph shows that the station is most crowded in the early morning and early evening periods. « Previous Next » SHARE THIS PAGE
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the fluctuation in the
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of
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at a London underground
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station
over the course of a day.

The busiest time of the day is in the morning. There is a sharp increase between 06: 00 and 08: 00, with 400
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people
using the
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at 8 o'clock.
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this the
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drop
quickly
to less than 200 at 10 o'clock. Between 11 am and 3 pm the
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rises, with a plateau of
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under 300
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using the station.

In the afternoon,
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numbers
decline, with less than 100 using the
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station
at 4 pm. There is then a rapid rise to a peak of 380 at 6pm. After 7 pm,
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fall
significantly
, with
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a slight increase again at 8pm, tailing off after 9 pm.

Overall
, the graph
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shows
that the
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station
is most crowded in the early morning and early evening periods.

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IELTS academic The graph shows the fluctuation in the number of people at a London underground station over the course of a day.

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6 paragraphs
155 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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