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the graph shows the cost for watching movies and change in market share of three different of watching movies

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The given line graph demonstrate the money spent on watching shows and illustrates the switich of market share by various platform to watch movies. overall, it is clearly visible that people had showed the great presence in the theatre pass for enjoying movies. In 2005, the cost of DVD player was 8 which had decline smoothly to 6 in 2007. In the next year it had a steady increase till 2011 to almost 9. the expense spent on legal download from internet was 6 in 2005. After 2 year, it had crossed the cost of DVD in 2009 and short up slowly in the next year. coming to the account of cinema ticket and it was clear winner in the term of most individuals spend on this. In 2005, it had gained 9 and it had gramatic rose in 2009. however, it had crossed the boundary line of 14.
The
given
line graph demonstrate the money spent on watching
shows
and illustrates the
switich
of market share by various platform to
watch
movies.
overall
, it is
clearly
visible that
people
had
showed
the great presence in the
theatre
pass for enjoying movies. In 2005, the cost of DVD player was 8 which had
decline
smoothly
to 6 in 2007. In the
next
year it had a steady increase till 2011 to almost 9.
the
expense spent on legal download from internet was 6 in 2005. After 2 year, it had crossed the cost of DVD in 2009 and short up
slowly
in the
next
year.
coming
to the account of cinema ticket and it was
clear
winner in the term of most individuals spend on this. In 2005, it had gained 9 and it had
gramatic
rose in 2009.
however
, it had crossed the boundary line of 14.
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IELTS academic the graph shows the cost for watching movies and change in market share of three different of watching movies

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