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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree and those with other qualifiacations. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree and those with other qualifiacations. KjmM
It is cleared that people with first degrees earned less than those with university or higher degrees. Overall, the general trend for all three types of graduates is an upward trend from the 20s to middle age and a fluctuation after that time. In the early 20s, the weekly salary of first-degree holders stood at just about 350 while higher degree's and other's were 390 and 415 respectively. However, first-degree graduates continued to earn more money steadily, especially from 38 to 43 when they had the highest amount of wages which were close to 700. Later, their weekly salary dropped slightly between the 45s and then rose to around 790 before retirement.
It
is cleared
that
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people
with
first
degrees earned less than those with university or higher degrees.
Overall
, the general trend for all three types of graduates is an upward trend from the 20s to middle age and a fluctuation after that time.

In the early 20s, the weekly salary of
first
-degree holders stood at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
about 350 while higher degree's and
Consider using the plural form here: "others".
other's
were 390 and 415
respectively
.
However
,
first
-degree graduates continued to earn more money
steadily
,
especially
from 38 to 43 when they had the highest amount of wages which were close to 700. Later, their weekly salary dropped
slightly
between the 45s and then rose to around 790
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
retirement.
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IELTS academic The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree and those with other qualifiacations.

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