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Hydro electronic power generation(process)

Hydro electronic power generation(process) oRWAD
The diagram provides an outline of the stages in generating electricity from water. The process begins with water in the ocean and ends with power being provided to buildings, such as hospitals and schools. To begin with, the heat of the sun evaporates water in the ocean, and then the water rises and forms into clouds. When it rains, these clouds drop some of their water into a reservoir, which is a large area used to store water. The water is kept in the reservoir with a dam that can be opened with a valve to release water down a hill. When the valve is opened the water flows down the hill and spins a turbine, sending electricity through high-voltage cables to a transformer station. From the transformer station, the electricity is sent to various places where it is needed, such as homes and factories. Finally, it is important to state that some of the surplus power generated by the turbine is used to pump the water back up into the reservoir so that it can be used to meet electricity demands in the future.
The diagram provides an outline of the stages in generating
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electricity
from
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water
. The process
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begins
with
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water
in the ocean and ends with power
being provided
to buildings, such as hospitals and schools.

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begin
with, the heat of the sun evaporates
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water
in the ocean, and then the
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water
rises and forms into clouds. When it rains, these clouds drop
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some
of their
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water
into a reservoir, which is a large area
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used
to store
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water
. The
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water
is
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kept
in the reservoir with a dam that can
be opened
with a valve to release
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water
down a hill. When the valve
is opened
the
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water
flows down the hill and spins a turbine, sending
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electricity
through high-voltage cables to a transformer station. From the transformer station, the
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electricity
is
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sent
to various places where it
is needed
, such as homes and factories.

Finally
, it is
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important
to state that
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some of the
surplus power generated by the turbine is
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used
to pump the
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water
back up into the reservoir
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so
that it can be
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used
to
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meet
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electricity
demands in the future.
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IELTS academic Hydro electronic power generation(process)

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
185 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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