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the proportion of different factors that contribute to the economy in Turkey

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the pie charts compare the proportion of different factors that contribute to the economy in Turkey over the period of 16 years Overall, The agriculture sector made up the highest proportion of the economy's contribution in 2000, while the figures for healthcare and education took up the largest percentage in 2016. In 2000, the amount of agriculture contributed to Turkey's economy accounted for 24% and the figure declined by 10% in 2016. In addition, Turkey received a slight decrease in the contribution of government and leisure and hospitality, by about 3%. However, the economy saw maintained stably in contribution's healthcare and education over the whole 16-year period, at around 17%. Turning to the remaining sectors, we can see that the period from 2000 to 2016 saw a minimal climb in the percentage of construction, manufacturing, trade, ulitlities and transportation and finance, business and other sector in the Turkey's economy. Especially, the figure for construction increased triple to appropriate 10% in 2016, while there was a slight growth in the proportion of trade, utilities and transportation during the period shown.
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, The agriculture sector made up the highest proportion of the economy's contribution in 2000, while the figures for healthcare and education took up the largest percentage in 2016.

In 2000, the amount of agriculture contributed to Turkey's
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accounted for 24% and the figure declined by 10% in 2016.
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and leisure and hospitality, by about 3%.
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, at around 17%.

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from 2000 to 2016
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a minimal climb in the percentage of construction, manufacturing, trade,
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and transportation and finance, business and other sector in the Turkey's
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IELTS academic the proportion of different factors that contribute to the economy in Turkey

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