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The following graph shows a hotel's job postings from 2008 to 2010a categories.

The following graph shows a hotel's job postings from 2008 to 2010a categories. 7POQ3
The bar chart illustrates the rate of hotel job recruitments in three continuous years: 2008, 2009, and 2010. Overall, in all the periods of three years, hotel managements witnessed the highest average proportion than the other remaining figures. And 2009 was recorded as the lowest job enrolling year. In 2008, similarly, both hotel management and hospitality reached its peak at 20 jobs which recorded an insignificantly lower rate of hospitality. In the meantime, sales and marketing received minor applications for the position which compared to other jobs at approximately over 8 jobs. Continuously, the sales and marketing rate reached its bottom in 2009 at only around 5, and two other figures also showed a dramatic drop in their numbers, particularly the hotel management and hospitality were respectively two times and three times lower than their previous year job quantities. Interestingly, not only the recruitment for Sales and Marketing jobs performed a reverse proportion in the last year which was four times higher than 2008 at over 16 jobs but also the hotel management got back to its pattern in the first given year, doubling its numbers from 12 jobs to nearly 20. In the meantime, hospitality was left behind with the lowest job enrollments at around 9 jobs.
The bar chart illustrates the rate of
hotel
job
recruitments in three continuous years: 2008, 2009, and 2010.

Overall
, in all the periods of three years,
hotel
managements
witnessed the highest average proportion than the other remaining figures. And 2009
was recorded
as the lowest
job
enrolling year.

In 2008,
similarly
, both
hotel
management
and
hospitality
reached its peak at 20
jobs
which recorded an
insignificantly
lower rate of
hospitality
. In the meantime, sales and marketing received minor applications for the position which compared to other
jobs
at approximately over 8
jobs
.
Continuously
, the sales and marketing rate reached its bottom in 2009 at
only
around 5, and two other figures
also
showed
a dramatic drop in their numbers,
particularly
the
hotel
management
and
hospitality
were
respectively
two times and three times lower than their previous
year
job
quantities.

Interestingly
, not
only
the recruitment for Sales and Marketing
jobs
performed a reverse proportion in the last
year
which was four times higher than 2008 at over 16
jobs
but
also
the
hotel
management
got
back to its pattern in the
first
given
year
, doubling its numbers from 12
jobs
to
nearly
20. In the meantime,
hospitality
was
left
behind with the lowest
job
enrollments at around 9
jobs
.
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IELTS academic The following graph shows a hotel's job postings from 2008 to 2010a categories.

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