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The graph shows inflow of foreign workers into Australia in between 1992 and 2001.

The graph shows inflow of foreign workers into Australia in between 1992 and 2001. YLElQ
The provided bar graph illustrates the amount of migrate employees came to Australia in period of ten years, 1992 to 2001. Overall, it can be seen that number of permanent settlers decreased after some fluctuations; while, proportion of temporary workers increased between 1992 and 2001. To begin with, 40000 permanent residents came to Australia in 1992; whereas, approximately 15000 temporary employees came for job, which is lower than former one. In 1993, amount of permanent settlers significantly fell to around 22000; this was  continued to decline till 12500 in 1994. Again number of permanent residents rose and reached to 20000 in 1995, this amount remained constant in following three years. After 1997, proportion of permanent settlers dramatically increased till 2001 and climbed at just over 35000. Moreover, number of temporary employees were 15000 in 1993. After that year, number slightly fell for next one year and stayed same in 1995. In 1996, amount of temporary workers moderately rose and reached to just above 15000. In following two years, it dramatically increased till approximately 37000. After fluctuation, it peaked to over 45000 in 2001.
The provided bar graph illustrates the
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of migrate employees came to Australia in period of ten years, 1992 to 2001.

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settlers decreased after
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fluctuations; while, proportion of
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workers increased between 1992 and 2001.

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with, 40000
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permanent
residents came to Australia in 1992; whereas, approximately 15000
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employees came for job, which is lower than former one. In 1993,
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of
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permanent
settlers
significantly
fell to around 22000; this was
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continued to decline till 12500 in 1994. Again
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of
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permanent
residents rose and reached to 20000 in 1995, this
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remained constant in following three years. After 1997, proportion of
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settlers
dramatically
increased till 2001 and climbed at
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over 35000.

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,
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of
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employees were 15000 in 1993. After that
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,
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slightly
fell for
next
one
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and stayed same in 1995. In 1996,
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of
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workers
moderately
rose and reached to
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above 15000. In following two years, it
dramatically
increased till approximately 37000. After fluctuation, it peaked to over 45000 in 2001.
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IELTS academic The graph shows inflow of foreign workers into Australia in between 1992 and 2001.

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