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The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5

The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5 n6b0K
The line chart illustrate the number of travellers who made their Journeys by train in Great Britain during 1950 to 2004/05. The scale is in millions. To start with, the national rail network was highest in 1950. Which was 1000 millions. Then it was continuous decline upto 1980. In1980 national railway network was around 600 million and after 1980 it was suddenly increased approximately 1, 100 millions in 2004/05. Apart from that passengers who travel by London underground was nearest to 600 millions and it was decrease rose slightly by 100 millions. Which was 500 millions in 1988. Then it was increase around 950 million in 2004/05. However, the light rail and metro system less preferred by Passenger. In 1960 which was roughly 50 millions and it was boost 150 millions in 2004/05. Overall, It is clear that the all the three networks are upward trend. The national rail network and London underground carries more passenger compare to the light rail and metro systems.
The line chart illustrate the number of
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travellers
who made their Journeys by train in Great Britain during 1950 to 2004/05. The scale is in millions.

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start
with, the national
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rail
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network
was highest in 1950. Which was 1000
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millions
. Then it was continuous decline
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upto
1980. In1980 national railway
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network
was around 600
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million
and after 1980 it was
suddenly
increased approximately 1, 100
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millions
in 2004/05. Apart from that passengers who travel by London underground was nearest to 600
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millions
and it was decrease rose
slightly
by 100
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millions
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was 500
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millions
in 1988. Then it was increase around 950
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million
in 2004/05.
However
, the light
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rail
and metro system less preferred by Passenger. In 1960 which was roughly 50
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millions
and it was boost 150
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millions
in 2004/05.

Overall
, It is
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clear
that the all the three
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networks
are upward trend. The national
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rail
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network
and London underground carries more passenger compare to the light
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rail
and metro systems.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/5

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