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The bar chart below shows the money spent per week on public transport by age group in Malaysia in the year 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the money spent per week on public transport by age group in Malaysia in the year 2008. awyDV
The bar chart illustrate the number of amount of currency spending on humankind transportation services individual week by five age group mankind in Malaysia, 2008. Firstly, in given information, who layman are under thirteen(under 30), they are using a rail service over a 35% repetition maximum per week but unfortunately the number of user are slowly decrease with older age. Secondly, the bus transportation services data are slightly fluctuated into age 50-65 other hand a group of layman over a 65 age the repetition percentages are rapidly down respectively. However in given information it is a clear that, All group of humankind prefer a taxi service, Leave all other local services. Over a 60% layman using a taxi service repetition maximum per week by under 50 age but a number slightly down over a 50 years old people, whereas a people passed age 65, the number of user are rapidly decrease 29 % to 19 % respectively. Overall, every group of age layman highly recommended a taxi service for traveling and less prefer the bus services during traveling.
The bar chart illustrate the
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mankind in Malaysia, 2008.
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data are
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50-65 other hand a
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highly
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for traveling and less prefer the bus
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