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The bar graph illustrates the worldwide sales of four varieties of digital games (mobile phone games, online games, console games and, handheld games) between 2000 and 2006.

The bar graph illustrates the worldwide sales of four varieties of digital games (mobile phone games, online games, console games and, handheld games) between 2000 and 2006. PV76J
The bar graph illustrates the worldwide sales of four varieties of digital games (mobile phone games, online games, console games and, handheld games) between 2000 and 2006. Overall, it can be clearly seen that handheld games were the most sold-out games and they became increasingly more popular over the years. Similarly, the sales of online games and mobile phone games increased whilst the sale of console games declined during the six year period. In 2000, handheld games and console games were sold for approximately 12 billion USD and 6 billion USD respectively. Handheld games continued to increase in sales and reached peak sales of around 17 billion USD in 2006. By contrast, the sales of console games decreased steadily and plummeted to around 3 USD in 2006. Online games started becoming available in 2001 and their sales increased steadily over the years. Mobile games hit the market in the following year and saw an increase in sales in the next four years. Whereas in 2001 online games worth a little over 1 billion USD were sold, their sales hit 8. 5 billion USD in 2006. On the other hand, the sales of mobile phone games rose from 2 billion USD in 2002 to over 7 billion USD in 2006.
The bar graph illustrates the worldwide
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sales
of four varieties of digital
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games
(mobile phone
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games
,
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online
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games
,
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console
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games
and, handheld
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between 2000 and 2006.

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clearly
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that handheld
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games
were the most sold-out
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games and
they became
increasingly
more popular
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of
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online
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and mobile phone
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increased whilst the
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of
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console
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declined during the six
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period. In 2000, handheld
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games
and
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console
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games
were sold
for approximately 12
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billion
USD and 6
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billion
USD
respectively
. Handheld
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continued to increase in
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and reached peak
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sales
of around 17
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billion
USD in 2006. By contrast, the
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of
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console
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decreased
steadily
and plummeted to around 3 USD in 2006.
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Online
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games
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started
becoming available in 2001 and their
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increased
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the years. Mobile
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hit the market in the following
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online
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games
worth a
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little
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over
1
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billion
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were sold
, their
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hit 8. 5
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billion
USD in 2006.
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of mobile phone
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rose from 2
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billion
USD in 2002 to
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7
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USD in 2006.
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IELTS academic The bar graph illustrates the worldwide sales of four varieties of digital games (mobile phone games, online games, console games and, handheld games) between 2000 and 2006.

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