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The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 200 to 2006.

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 200 to 2006. GMd12
The bar chart illustrates the world sales of various kinds of(mobile phone, online, console and handheld)games between 2000 and 2006. The charts are measured in billions. Overall, handheld games expreinced an upward trend while console entertainment showed a downward trend throughout the period. To begin with, the number of handheld games was accounted for around eleven dollars billions in the first year(2000). Also, the games rate increased from $13 to $14 in the year 2003. Despite the games had similar ratio in the following two year(2004 and 2005) approximately $15 billions. At the end of period, the rates increased rapidly around $17 billions in the nations. However, in terms of console games, at the beginning of the period, the rate was just below $6 billions whereas the sales of games were decreased gradually at the end of the period. Likewise, online games and mobile phone games were by around $4 billions in the year 2004 but the rates of online games enlarged steadily in the year 2006 which were comprised to $11 billions.
The bar chart illustrates the world sales of various kinds of(mobile phone, online, console and handheld)games between 2000 and 2006. The charts
are measured
in billions.

Overall
, handheld
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games
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expreinced
an upward trend while console entertainment
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showed
a downward trend throughout the period.

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begin
with, the number of handheld
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games
was accounted
for around eleven dollars
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billions
in the
first
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year(2000)
.
Also
, the
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games
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rate
increased from $13 to $14 in the
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year
2003. Despite the
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games
had similar ratio in the following two
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year(2004
and 2005) approximately $15
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billions
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end
of period, the
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rates
increased
rapidly
around $17
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billions
in the nations.

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games
, at the beginning of the period, the
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rate
was
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just
below $6
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billions
whereas the sales of
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games
were decreased
gradually
at the
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end
of the period.
Likewise
, online
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games
and mobile phone
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games
were by around $4
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billions
in the
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year
2004
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but
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rates
of online
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games
enlarged
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2006 which
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