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The graph shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five year period.

THE BAR CHARTS GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT THE EXPENDITURE FOR SEVERAL TYES OF ENTERTAINMENT IN THREE CONTINENTS, FROM 1995 TO 2000. FIRSTLY, IT CAN BE SEEN THAT THE UNITED STATES IS THE COUNTRY WHERE PEOPLE HAVE SPENT MORE FOR PLEASURE, WITH THE PEAKS OF 184 AND 257, REACHED RESPECTIVELY IN 1995 AND 2000. WHEREAS, THE GENERAL ENTERTAINMENT EXPENDITURE IN ASIA AND EUROPE, OVER THE PERIOD GIVEN, WAS LESS THAN HALF IN COMPARISON WITH THE UNITED STATES. SECONDLY, THE UNITED STATES AND ASIA HAVE FOLLOWED A SIMILAR TREND WITH A STEADILY INCREMENT OF MONEY USED FOR ALL THE FORMS OF ENTERTAINMENT CONSIDERED BY THE GRAPH. INSTEAD, IN EUROPE, IF THERE WAS A GROWTH IN THE USAGE OF PUBLISHING, VIDEO AND TELEVISION, THE AMOUNT OF MONEY SPENT TO ENJOY MUSIC AND CINEMA HAVE REMAINED STEADY OVER THE FIVE YEARS. TO CONCLUDE, THERE HAVE BEEN A DRAMATIC RISE IN MONEY SPENT FOR PLEASURE ALL OVER THE WORLD FROM 1995 TO 2000: THE AMUSEMENT EXPENSES INCREASED OF 73 IN THE UNITED STATES, OF 43 IN ASIA AND OF 34 IN EUROPE.
THE BAR CHARTS GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT THE EXPENDITURE FOR SEVERAL
TYES
OF ENTERTAINMENT IN THREE CONTINENTS, FROM 1995 TO 2000.

FIRSTLY
, IT CAN BE
SEEN
THAT THE
UNITED STATES
IS THE COUNTRY WHERE
PEOPLE
HAVE SPENT MORE FOR PLEASURE, WITH THE PEAKS OF 184 AND 257, REACHED
RESPECTIVELY
IN 1995 AND 2000. WHEREAS, THE GENERAL ENTERTAINMENT EXPENDITURE IN ASIA AND EUROPE, OVER THE PERIOD
GIVEN
, WAS LESS THAN HALF
IN COMPARISON
WITH THE
UNITED STATES
.

SECONDLY
, THE
UNITED STATES
AND ASIA HAVE FOLLOWED A SIMILAR TREND WITH A
STEADILY
INCREMENT OF MONEY
USED
FOR ALL THE FORMS OF ENTERTAINMENT CONSIDERED BY THE GRAPH.
INSTEAD
, IN EUROPE, IF THERE WAS A GROWTH IN THE USAGE OF PUBLISHING, VIDEO AND TELEVISION, THE AMOUNT OF MONEY SPENT TO ENJOY MUSIC AND CINEMA HAVE REMAINED STEADY OVER THE FIVE YEARS.

TO CONCLUDE
, THERE HAVE BEEN A DRAMATIC RISE IN MONEY SPENT FOR PLEASURE ALL OVER THE WORLD FROM 1995 TO 2000: THE AMUSEMENT EXPENSES INCREASED OF 73 IN THE
UNITED STATES
, OF 43 IN ASIA AND OF 34 IN EUROPE.
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