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The graph shows changes in the number of cars per household in Great Britain over a period of 36 years

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the graph demonstrates how many of cars per house in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007. it is observed that number of houses which have a car increase over a period of 36 years. people who have two cars in household increased significantly. In 1971, it is about %10 and it rose about 30% in 2007. In other words, houses which have two cars increased about 20%. Also how many person who had not got car decreased. their number decreased from about 50% to about 25%. On the other hand, The rate of one car per household over 36 years has been almost constant, it was about 45%. Additionally, three or more cars line changed slightly. Its value approached 10%. In conclusion, It shows the change in the number of cars per household by years. the number of cars per household increased from 1971 to 2007.
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in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007.
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decreased from about 50% to about 25%.

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over 36 years has been almost constant, it was about 45%.
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IELTS academic The graph shows changes in the number of cars per household in Great Britain over a period of 36 years

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