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The graph illustrates the levels of different types of fast food consumption by Australian Teenagers for 25 years which is from 1975 to 2000.

The graph illustrates the levels of different types of fast food consumption by Australian Teenagers for 25 years which is from 1975 to 2000. eKbxx
The graph illustrates the levels of different types of fast food consumption by Australian Teenagers for 25 years which is from 1975 to 2000. During the year 1975, Fish and Chips were dominating the fast-food market compared to the other two food items such as Pizza and Hamburgers. Fish and Chips have been consumed 100 times in 1975 where they gradually decreased. After a decade it appears to slowly increase, Despite this, there are no further improvements and the number got reduced drastically. On the other hand, Pizza and hamburgers have been the least eaten fast-food items which seem to be five times as less as the consumption of fish and chips. There has been moderate growth for Hamburgers for the two decades. In 1975 the record created by Fish and Chips has been achieved by Hamburgers in 1995. However, the growth of Pizza has been growing considerably but still, there is a one-fifth difference between Pizza and Hamburgers. Overall, Fish and Chips had been at the top in 1975 but decreases drastically, abreast this Pizza and Hamburgers maintained a substantial growth without any intervention in growth.
The graph illustrates the levels of
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different
types of
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fast
food consumption by Australian
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Teenagers
for 25 years which is from 1975 to 2000.

During the year 1975, Fish and Chips were dominating the
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fast
-food market compared to the other two food items such as Pizza and Hamburgers. Fish and Chips have
been consumed
100 times in 1975 where they
gradually
decreased. After a decade it appears to
slowly
increase, Despite this, there are no
further
improvements and the number
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got
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reduced
drastically
.

On the other hand
, Pizza and hamburgers have been the least eaten
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fast
-food items which seem to be five times as
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less
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as
the consumption of fish and chips. There has been moderate
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growth
for Hamburgers for the two decades. In 1975 the record created by Fish and Chips has
been achieved
by Hamburgers in 1995.
However
, the
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growth
of Pizza has been growing
considerably
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but
still
, there is a one-fifth difference between Pizza and Hamburgers.

Overall
, Fish and Chips had been at the top in 1975
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but
decreases
drastically
, abreast this Pizza and Hamburgers maintained a substantial
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growth
without any intervention in
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growth
.

IELTS academic The graph illustrates the levels of different types of fast food consumption by Australian Teenagers for 25 years which is from 1975 to 2000.

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