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The graph illustrates the percentage of households which own and rent accommodation in England from 1918 to 2011.

The graph illustrates the percentage of households which own and rent accommodation in England from 1918 to 2011. 15Xbq
Households in owned accommodation from 1918 to 2001 achieving a stability or ascension but in 2011 the a decline about 5 percent. At the same time households in rented accommodation they actually drop in percent, but in 2011 there was a slight increase. I’m not too sure the rate of the increase or the percent decline, but i reckon that percentage was helpful and affected by the households. They are opposite, because at the beginning households in owned accommodation starting at the bottom percent, but households in rented accommodation being in the high percent. This percentage makes it easier to look at process year after year.
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from 1918 to 2001 achieving a stability or ascension
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in 2011
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in rented
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they actually drop in
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,
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in 2011 there was a slight increase. I’m not
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the rate of the increase or the
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decline,
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reckon that percentage was helpful and
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affected
by the households.

They are opposite,
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at the beginning
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households
in
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owned
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accommodation
starting at the bottom
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percent
,
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but
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in rented
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accommodation
being in the high percent.

This percentage
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makes
it easier to look at process year after year.
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates the percentage of households which own and rent accommodation in England from 1918 to 2011.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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