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The graph illustrates the percentage of Canadian boys and girls who participate in four various relaxation activities.

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Over the leisure activities, Canadian youngsters are much more involved in shopping than all other actions while females are steadily heightened from sports to music and suddenly dropped in shopping. Canadian youth 27% involved in sports and gradually decreased to 18% in computer games whereas only 12% of girls obsessed in sports and heightened to 15% in computer games while girls and fellow are equally obsessed in music. Boys are highly ​involved in spending than other threevarious relaxation exercise whoare jumped suddenly from 19% music to 34% in shopping whereasonly 6% of females participated in shopping which isextremely least over the four convenience activities The graph illustrates the percentage of Canadian boys and girls who participate in four various relaxation(LEISURE) activities. Over the leisure activities, Canadian youngsters(BOYS) are much more involved in shopping than all other actions while females are steadily heightened(HIGHLY) from sports to music and suddenly dropped in shopping. Canadian youth(BOYS) 27% involved in sports and gradually decreased to 18% in computer games whereas only 12% of girls obsessed in sports and heightened to 15% in computer games while girls and fellow are equally obsessed in music. Boys are highly ​involved in spending than other three various relaxation(ACTIVITIES) exercise whoare jumped suddenly from 19% music to 34% in shopping whereasonly 6% of females participated in shopping which is extremely(VERY) least over the four convenience activities
Over the leisure activities, Canadian youngsters are much more involved in
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shopping
than all
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other
actions while
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females
are
steadily
heightened from
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sports
to
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music
and
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suddenly
dropped in shopping.

Canadian youth 27% involved in
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sports
and
gradually
decreased to 18% in computer
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games
whereas
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only
12% of
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girls
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obsessed
in
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sports
and heightened to 15% in computer
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games
while
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girls
and fellow are
equally
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obsessed
in music.

Boys are
highly
​involved in spending than
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other
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threevarious
relaxation exercise
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whoare
jumped
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suddenly
from 19%
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music
to 34% in
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shopping
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whereasonly
6% of
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females
participated in
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shopping
which
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isextremely
least over the four convenience activities

The graph illustrates the percentage of Canadian boys and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
who participate in four various relaxation(LEISURE) activities.

Over the leisure activities, Canadian youngsters(BOYS) are much more involved in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
than all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
actions while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
are
steadily
heightened(
HIGHLY
) from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
suddenly
dropped in shopping.

Canadian youth(BOYS) 27% involved in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
and
gradually
decreased to 18% in computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
whereas
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
12% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
obsessed
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
and heightened to 15% in computer
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
girls
and fellow are
equally
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
obsessed
in music.

Boys are
highly
​involved in spending than
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other
three various relaxation(ACTIVITIES) exercise
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whoare
jumped
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suddenly
from 19%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
to 34% in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
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whereasonly
6% of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
females
participated in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
which is
extremely
(
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
VERY
) least over the four convenience activities
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates the percentage of Canadian boys and girls who participate in four various relaxation activities.

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