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the graph illustrates the data about the number of hamburgers were sold by Harry's sales in 2007 between January and December.

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The graph highlights the data about how many hamburgers were sold over a year period by Harry's sales between January and December in 2007. Overall, the graph shows a considerable peak and then a downward trend between August and October. Being around 2000 in January, it saw a marginal fall during March, April, and May months. The sales of hamburgers then surged negligibly between May and June. Having fluctuated for five months about 1700 of sales, the graph saw a dramatic increase in July and August months and reached 3000 of hamburger sales. With the respect to the graph, it saw a striking decrease again in the next two months of September and October to the number of about 1300. But looking at the graph, we get the information that the figure then went up significantly, being around 1750 sales of hamburgers in Nowember and December months.
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between January and December in 2007.
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a considerable peak and then a downward trend between August and October. Being around 2000 in January, it
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a marginal fall during March, April, and May
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. The
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of hamburgers then surged
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between May and June. Having fluctuated for five
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about 1700 of
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, the
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a dramatic increase in July and August
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and reached 3000 of hamburger
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. With the respect to the
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, it
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a striking decrease again in the
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two
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of September and October to the number of about 1300.
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looking at the
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, we
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the information that the figure then went up
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, being around 1750
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IELTS academic the graph illustrates the data about the number of hamburgers were sold by Harry's sales in 2007 between January and December.

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