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The graph illustrates the average temperature of all months in the three cities of the world London, New York and Sydney while,the table shows the average number of sunlight in a year in these three places.

The graph illustrates the average temperature of all months in the three cities of the world London, New York and Sydney while, the table shows the average number of sunlight in a year in these three places. pXyOL
The graph illustrates the average temperature of all months in the three cities of the world London, New York and Sydney while, the table shows the average number of sunlight in a year in these three places. Overall, New York found one of the highest changes in temperature during the year and in total number of annual hours of sunshine. On the other hand, London got the least one in total hours of sunshine. Sydney has received the most decrements rate in terms of weather changes in a year. It is quite clear from the graph, London and New York have been receiving rising in the temperature between the month January to July by 0-10% to 20-30% while, in Sydney early it was by 25% in the month of January which has decreased up to 15% by July and later on, it has increased by 35% However, the table gives the information that, New York was one of the best city for getting maximum sunlight during the year by 2535 hours followed by Sydney by 2473 hours. Besides that, London was the city where sunshine was one of the least one by 1180 hours annually.
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York and Sydney while, the table
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the average number of sunlight in a year in these three places.

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York found one of the highest
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in temperature during the year and in total number of annual
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of sunshine.
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the least one in total
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of sunshine. Sydney has received the most decrements rate in terms of weather
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changes
in a year.

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from the graph, London and
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New
York have been receiving rising in the temperature between the month January to July by 0-10% to 20-30% while, in Sydney early it was by 25% in the month of January which has decreased up to 15% by July and later on, it has increased by 35%

However
, the table gives the information that,
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New
York was one of the best city for getting maximum sunlight during the year by 2535
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followed by Sydney by 2473
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.
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates the average temperature of all months in the three cities of the world London, New York and Sydney while, the table shows the average number of sunlight in a year in these three places.

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