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The graph illustrates the amount of rain and the temperature by C.

The graph illustrates the amount of rain and the temperature by C. It also divides by months of the year. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the line slowly goes up and after getting to its peak goes steadily down. This trend occurs to temperature and precipitation during the whole months of the year. While the highest point of precipitation is in July reaching almost 350 mm, the warmest temperature is in May, which is 30 C. On the other hand, the temperature and precipitation is extremely down during January and December (slightly more than 20 degrees and 0 mm in both months). Evidently, data shows that during the period of June to October there is a high amount of rain varying between around 250 mm to 150 mm. During the same months, the temperature is also dropping and it goes from slightly more than 25 degrees to 15 degrees. Although the occurrence of rain is gradually going up during the period of January and May, in general, it is still not a heavy rain because it is ranging from almost 0 to 100 mm. Furthermore, it is observed that the weather is in its lowest temperatures. Conversely, it is getting warmer in the first months of the year due the fact that temperature went from 20 to around 30 degrees in May.
The graph illustrates the amount of
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rain
and the
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temperature
by C. It
also
divides by
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months
of the year.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
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seen
that the line
slowly
goes up and after getting to its peak goes
steadily
down. This trend occurs to
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temperature
and precipitation during the whole
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months
of the year.

While the highest point of precipitation is in July reaching almost 350 mm, the warmest
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temperature
is in May, which is 30 C.
On the other hand
, the
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temperature
and precipitation is
extremely
down during January and December (
slightly
more than 20 degrees and 0 mm in both months).

Evidently
, data
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shows
that during the period of June to October there is a high amount of
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rain
varying between around 250 mm to 150 mm. During the same
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months
, the
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temperature
is
also
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dropping and
it goes from
slightly
more than 25 degrees to 15 degrees.

Although the occurrence of
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rain
is
gradually
going up during the period of January and May,
in general
, it is
still
not a heavy
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rain
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because
it is ranging from almost 0 to 100 mm.
Furthermore
, it
is observed
that the weather is in its lowest
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temperatures
.
Conversely
, it is getting warmer in the
first
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months
of the year due the fact that
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temperature
went from 20 to around 30 degrees in May.
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates the amount of rain and the temperature by C.

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