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The graph illustrates people’s opinions in China, India, Germany and the USA about four environmental issues in a period of 10 years

The graph illustrates people’s opinions in China, India, Germany and the USA about four environmental issues in a period of 10 years 96L20
The graph illustrates people’s opinions in China, India, Germany and the USA about four environmental issues in a period of 10 years Overall, the graph shows that attitudes towards water shortages, air pollution, climate change and automobile emissions has altered rapidly over time. People were, from the other hand, less worried about each of the problems in 2010 than they had been in previous years. The most anxiety is caused from water shortage with approximately 70 percent of people’s rates in 2009. Air pollutionis the second highest problem, under 70 percent of people’s rates, was worried about. Climate change was the issue about which the fewest individuals (about 50%) showed significant concern in 2000. There was a steady decline in concern over this between 2000 and 2003. At the beginning of the period, people were less concerned about climate change than about automobile emissions, but that changed in 2006. To conclusion, i am sure that the environmental problems will be reduce in the future.
The graph illustrates
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people’s
opinions in China, India, Germany and the USA about four environmental issues in a period of 10 years

Overall
, the graph
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that attitudes towards water shortages, air pollution, climate
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change
and automobile emissions has altered
rapidly
over time.
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People
were, from the other hand, less worried about each of the problems in 2010 than they had been in previous years.

The most anxiety
is caused
from water shortage with approximately 70 percent of
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people’s
rates in 2009. Air
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pollutionis
the second highest problem, under 70 percent of
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people’s
rates,
was worried
about.

Climate
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change
was the issue about which the fewest individuals (about 50%)
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showed
significant concern in 2000. There was a steady decline in concern over this between 2000 and 2003. At the beginning of the period,
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people
were less concerned about climate
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change
than about automobile emissions,
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but
that
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changed
in 2006.

To conclusion,
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am sure that the environmental problems will be
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reduce
in the future.
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates people’s opinions in China, India, Germany and the USA about four environmental issues in a period of 10 years

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