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The graph illustrate the average proportion of temperature and and rainfall in a particular country in the world

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The given column and line graph illustrate the information about the monthly standard of temperature and rainfall of a significant zone in the world. Looking at the graph in more detail, in January, the rainfall around 20 mm which increase steadily 200 mm in May. However, rainfall rise rapidly and reads an all-time high at around 330 mm in July. In contrast, the rainfall decrease rapidly reached at 150 mm in October. December has   become the driest month with a rainfall of roughly around 10 mm. Furthermore, in January, the temperature is around 12 Celsius. Then, temperature grow slightly in April reached at 25 Celsius. In May the temperature at the highest point of 30 Celsius. It drops slightly to 30 Celsius in August. Next, temperature drop drastically to 20 Celsius my December. Overall, it can be seen that the maximum rainfall happen in July, while the list happen in December. Moreover,   temperature fluctuated throughout the year
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given
column and line graph illustrate the information about the monthly standard of
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temperature
and
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rainfall
of a significant zone in the world.

Looking at the graph in more detail, in January, the
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rainfall
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around
20 mm which increase
steadily
200 mm in May.
However
,
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rainfall
rise
rapidly
and reads an all-time high at
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around
330 mm in July.
In contrast
, the
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rainfall
decrease
rapidly
reached at 150 mm in October. December has
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become the driest month with a
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rainfall
of roughly
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around
10 mm.

Furthermore
, in January, the
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temperature
is
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around
12 Celsius. Then,
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temperature
grow
slightly
in April reached at 25 Celsius. In
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May


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the
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temperature
at the highest point of 30 Celsius. It drops
slightly
to 30 Celsius in August.
Next
,
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temperature
drop
drastically
to 20 Celsius my December.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the maximum
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rainfall
happen in July, while the list happen in December.
Moreover
,
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temperature
fluctuated throughout the year
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IELTS academic The graph illustrate the average proportion of temperature and and rainfall in a particular country in the world

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5 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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