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The graph gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

The graph gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Ypqd
The line graph shows the information about how much percentage changes in the births and deaths in new Zealand from 1901 to 2101. Overall, the births rates experience rapid changes in the past, while the deaths rates gradual increases. In the 1901 births rate is 20%. After that the population of the newly born sharply growth and peaked 65% approximately in the 1961. Then after quickly drop sharply under the 50% in the 1981. From then on the birth rate picked up again and has reached 60% and After that again droped down still 2101. By contrast, the death rate has been increased continued still 2041. In 2101 after that declined around 55%.
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the information about how much percentage
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changes
in the
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births
and deaths in
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new Zealand
from 1901 to 2101.

Overall
, the
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births
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rates
experience rapid
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changes
in the past, while the deaths
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rates
gradual increases.

In the 1901
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births
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rate
is 20%. After that the population of the
newly
born
sharply
growth and peaked 65% approximately in the 1961. Then after
quickly
drop
sharply
under the 50% in the 1981. From then on the
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birth
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rate
picked up again and has reached 60% and After that again
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droped
down
still
2101.

By contrast, the death
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rate
has
been increased
continued
still
2041. In 2101 after that declined around 55%.

IELTS academic The graph gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

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