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The graph depicts the number of train rider

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The line graph at the top depicts the number of train rider from 2000 to 2009 while the line graph below compares the proportion of trains that run on time to the target. Overall, it is clear that the number of people who use train remain relatively stable throughout the period. In addition, the percentage of trains that run punctually falls below the target most of the time. The number of people using train rose moderately from around 35 million to around 45 million passengers. In the following years, the figure fell slightly from 45 million to 40 million users then rose to just above 40 million users Regarding the second line graph, the proportion of trains running on time rose considerably from 92% to 96% in 2004, rose above the target line. The figure then fell by 5% in 2006, which makes it below the target. The proportion of trains running on time rose above the target line again in 2008 at 97% then remain steady until the end of the period.
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graph at the top depicts the number of
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train
rider from 2000 to 2009 while the
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graph below compares the proportion of
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trains
that run on time to the target.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the number of
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people
who
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use
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train
remain
relatively
stable throughout the period.
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, the percentage of
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trains
that run
punctually
falls below the
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target
most of the time.

The number of
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people
using
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train
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rose
moderately
from around 35
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million
to around 45
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million
passengers. In the following years, the figure fell
slightly
from 45
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million
to 40
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million
users then
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rose
to
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just
above 40
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million
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users


Regarding the second
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graph, the proportion of
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trains
running on time
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rose
considerably
from 92% to 96% in 2004,
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rose
above the
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target
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. The figure then fell by 5% in 2006, which
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makes
it below the
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target
. The proportion of
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trains
running on time
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rose
above the
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target
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again in 2008 at 97% then remain steady until the
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end
of the period.

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