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The diagrams depicts how a fire extinguisher works.

The diagrams depicts how a fire extinguisher works. 70Njy
The main parts of fire extinguisher and the methodology of its functioning are illustrated in the diagram. At firs glance it can be clearly seen that, the fire extinguisher has eight parts(a pin, n, a valve, a cartridge of gas, a siphon tube, a water container, a lever and a rod). Initially, the pin should be pulled out which activates the whole system. Next as the lever is pushed down rod open valve, consequently gas is released into the container. Subsequently, water forced up through the siphon tube, followed by water is thrown toward the source of the fire through the nuzzle to make fire extinguish. Finally, if the lever is released, the rod will retreat to the first position and close valve, consequently, the releasing of gas is stopped. Overall, the fire extinguisher has a simple mechanism which contain eight parts and start working by pushing down lever after removing pin, and the function will be inhibited if lever is released.
The main parts of
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fire
extinguisher and the methodology of its functioning
are illustrated
in the diagram.

At firs glance it can be
clearly
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seen
that, the
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fire
extinguisher has eight parts(a pin, n, a valve, a cartridge of gas, a siphon tube, a water container, a
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lever
and a rod).

Initially
, the pin should
be pulled
out which activates the whole system.
Next
as the
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lever
is pushed
down rod open valve,
consequently
gas
is released
into the container.
Subsequently
, water forced up through the siphon tube, followed by water
is thrown
toward the source of the
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fire
through
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'nuzzle' is correct. If 'nuzzle' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the nuzzle
to
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make
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fire
extinguish.
Finally
, if the
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lever
is released
, the rod will retreat to the
first
position and close valve,
consequently
, the releasing of gas is
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stopped
.

Overall
, the
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fire
extinguisher has a simple mechanism which contain eight parts and
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start
working by pushing down
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lever
after removing pin, and the function will
be inhibited
if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lever
is released
.

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