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Figures for imprisonment in five countries

Figures for imprisonment in five countries GLbVo

The bar graph shows the number of detainees in five countries - Britain, Australia, New Zealand, US and Canada between 1930 and 1980. Overall, Canada had the highest number of prisoners in 1930 while Great Britain had the least, but after 50 years, the number of prisoners decreased in Canada and the United States had the highest prisoners. In Great Britain the numbers in prison have increased steadily from 30 000 in 1930 to 80, 000 in 1980. On the other hand in Australia, and particularly in New Zealand the numbers fell markedly from 1930 to 1940. Since then they have increased gradually, apart from in 1980 when the numbers in prison in New Zealand fell by about 30, 000 from the 1970 total. Canada is the only country in which the numbers in prison have decreased over the period 1930 to 1980. All in all it is crystal clear that the given bar graph had the highest prison rates in united states and the lowest in Canada.

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 of prisoners decreased in Canada and the United States had the highest prisoners.

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 and the lowest in Canada. 