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The graph compars the gdp per capita into cost of toyota camry

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The graph compares the GDP per capita, cost of a Toyota Camry and approximate length of time it takes for 1 citizen to purchase that mode of transport in eight Asian countries. Despite having the second lowest average yearly income, it costs more to buy this car in Vietnam than in all but one other Asian nation. It also takes significantly longer for a standard person to buy an automobile in Vietnam than in any other state in Asia. On the other end of the scale, Singaporeans have to pay nearly three times more for their cars than the Vietnamese and it takes them the least amount of time to afford a motor vehicle. It costs $49, 944 to buy a Toyota Camry in Vietnam, but this dwarfs the average yearly income per person at just $1, 910. It would therefore take a normal man or woman 26. 1 years to save up for that particular car. This is in contrast to Singapore where it costs $126, 245 for that model of motorcar, however the average salary is much greater at $55, 182. This means that it generally takes just over 2 years for a typical individual from Singapore to acquire this vehicle.
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that mode of transport in eight Asian countries.

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