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The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

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Pollution is an argument extremely important in this last years. Environmental pollutions it's very dangerous for animals and plants, but for humans too. There are people who studies and works for limited the pollutions in the air, in the rivers, lakes and seas. This because, in this environment, lives a lot of species of animals and plants. Possible causes of water pollution are severage. First, pollutions it's caused from rubbish of human. I think this is horrible, because the first causes of water pollutions it's take by us, by the man. Another possible problem the industries, that drain of dangerous liquid to water. The effect that this liquid could causes to animal life are many and a lot of are directly linked with human society. Such us the fishing. Pollution, every year, is always increase. So, we can find how limited it and try to requalify the environment. I belive in the study, for example enviranmental engineering who studies every day to solve this important problem. We, normal people can help they too. For example, in this period, people throw in the sea mask that a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a a
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for animals and plants,
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for humans too. There are
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, in this environment,
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it's caused from rubbish of human. I
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. Another possible problem the industries, that drain of
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liquid to water.

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IELTS academic The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

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