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The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. pGX9
The graph demonstrates the amount spent by customers in US on cellphone and residential phone services from 2001 to 2010 in dollars. The Graph shows a continuous decrease in expenditure on Residential phone services from 2001 to 2010. The expense has decreased from about 700 dollars to approximately 400 dollars from 2001 to 2010. In contrast, the Cellphone services show a continuous increment in the expenditure. The expense has increased from just above 200 dollars in 2001 to above 700 dollars by 2010. The expenditure in Cellphone services show a lesser assent in the periods from 2002 to 2003 and 2007 to 2008. The increment in these periods is lesser than approximately 100 dollars per year. They are followed and preceeded by a similar degree of assent till 2010. The expenditure in Resedential phone services shows the steepest decline in the period 2006 to 2007 preceeded by an approximatelt constant rate of decine till 2010 and followed by a similar rate of decline.
The graph demonstrates the amount spent by customers in US on cellphone and residential phone
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services
from 2001 to 2010 in dollars.

The Graph
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shows
a continuous decrease in
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expenditure
on Residential phone
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services
from 2001 to 2010.
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The
expense has decreased from about 700
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dollars
to approximately 400
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dollars
from 2001 to 2010.

In contrast
, the Cellphone
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services
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show
a continuous increment in the
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expenditure
. The expense has increased from
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just
above 200
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dollars
in 2001 to above 700
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dollars
by 2010.

The
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expenditure
in Cellphone
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services
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show
a lesser assent in the periods from 2002 to 2003 and 2007 to 2008.
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The
increment in these periods is lesser than approximately 100
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dollars
per year. They
are followed
and
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preceeded
by a similar degree of assent till 2010.

The
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expenditure
in
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Resedential
phone
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services
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shows
the steepest decline in the period 2006 to 2007
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preceeded
by an
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approximatelt
constant rate of
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decine
till 2010 and followed by a similar rate of decline.

IELTS academic The graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

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