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the graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000

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The bar chart compares the types of transportation that used by people to go to and from their workplaces in a European City in three different years: 1960, 1980, and 2000. Overall, people who used car for commuting rose significantly from year to year while people using bus showed a substantial decrease. Furthermore, the number of people who took the train and tube in the same city experienced a fluctuate figure during the period given. Turning to details, initially most people in the city used to commute with bus, with the figures of nearly 40 percent and followed by tube in the second place with above 25 percent in 1960. Meanwhile, the train and the car took the smallest figure, 18 percent and 7 percent, respectively. Over the next 20 years, train and bus became the highest of transportation systems that people used as their mode of office transportation with the same figure of 27 percent. In the same year, the popularity of car climbed considerably with about 23 percent, although not as much as the train and bus that ranked first, while the tube being the least used mode of transport with about 21 percent. Subsequently, in 2000, there were still an extensive growth in the figures of people who used car as their transportation with more than 30 percent. The same thing happened with tube that experienced a moderate increase with 25 percent in the same year. In contrast, the train and the bus seemed to lost its appeal as mode of transport with roughly 21 percent and 15 percent, respectively.
The bar chart compares the types of
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to go to and from their workplaces in a European City in three
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years: 1960, 1980, and 2000.

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used
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car
for commuting rose
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year
to
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people
using bus
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showed
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people
who took the
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train
and
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tube
in the same city experienced
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figure
during the period
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,
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in the city
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used
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and followed by
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in the second place with above 25
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in 1960. Meanwhile, the
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and the
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car
took the smallest
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, 18
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and 7
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,
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. Over the
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transportation
systems that
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used
as their mode of office
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transportation
with the same
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figure
of 27
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. In the same
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, the popularity of
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climbed
considerably
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, although not as much as the
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first
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being the least
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mode of transport with about 21 percent.

Subsequently
, in 2000, there were
still
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who
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car
as their
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with more than 30
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percent
. The same thing happened with
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tube
that experienced a moderate increase with 25
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in the same
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In contrast
, the
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and the bus seemed to lost its appeal as mode of transport with roughly 21
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and 15
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IELTS academic the graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000

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