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the following diagrams show a current map of Peyton Park and a plan for proposed changes.

the following diagrams show a current map of Peyton Park and a plan for proposed changes. kAgM
The first diagram delineates the current condition of Peyton Park, while the second one depicts about a possible propose changes for the future Peyton Park. Overall, there will be several changes in terms of the layout of the park in the future. Furthermore, some facilities will be added in the park such as playground and a swimming dock. As we can see in the current setting of Peyton Park, there are picnic area, lake, tennis court, and parking lot as the amenities in the park. The picnic area is located on the north of the park. Meanwhile, there are a tennis court on the west side of the park or the left side of the lake and also a parking lot which can be seen in the south of the park. In the proposed changes of the park, a playground and a swimming dock will be provided as addition facilities in the park. The playground will be located on the north-west of the park next to the picnic area. Whereas, the tennis court will be moved to the east side of the lake and the lake will also have a swimming dock added to its left. Lastly, the parking lot will remain in the same position which is in the south of the lake.
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first
diagram delineates the
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current
condition of Peyton
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Park
, while the second one depicts about a possible propose
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changes
for the future Peyton Park.

Overall
, there will be several
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changes
in terms of the layout of the
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park
in the future.
Furthermore
,
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some
facilities will be
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added
in the
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park
such as playground and a swimming dock.

As we can
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see
in the
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current
setting of Peyton
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Park
, there are picnic area,
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lake
, tennis court, and parking lot as the amenities in the
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park
. The picnic area
is located
on the north of the
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park
. Meanwhile, there are a tennis court on the west side of the
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park
or the
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left
side of the
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lake
and
also
a parking lot which can be
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seen
in the south of the park.

In the proposed
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changes
of the
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park
, a playground and a swimming dock will
be provided
as addition facilities in the
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park
. The playground will
be located
on the north-west of the
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park
next
to the picnic area. Whereas, the tennis court will be
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moved
to the east side of the
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lake
and the
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lake
will
also
have a swimming dock
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added
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left
.
Lastly
, the parking lot will remain in the same position which is in the south of the
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lake
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IELTS academic the following diagrams show a current map of Peyton Park and a plan for proposed changes.

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