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The bar graph below shows the total world agricultural export between year 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar graph below shows the total world agricultural export between year 1960 to 2000. 66GjK
The bar graph illustrates the total export of world agricultural in USD in the year 1960 to 2000. First of all in 1960 to 1970 there was steady growth in the exporting of the agricultural products. It rises from around 40 billion USD to around 70 billion USD. Then from 1970 to 1980 in there was a rapid increase in exporting the agricultural products from around 70 billion USD 23 10 billion USD after that there was a steady fall from 1980 to mid of 1990 with exports decreasing 250 billion USD. Then there was again rapid increase in the exports from made of 1990 to end of 1990. In 990 the exports was increased from nearly 250 billion USD to more than 450 billion USD. From 1992 mid of 2006 boats was again increase from 450 million USD to more than 600 billion USD. There was a steady decrease in the export. Moreover it has overcome the loss and converted into the profit for more than 700 billion USD till the ending of the year 2000. So it shows us the overall information of the total export of the agricultural all over the world with their increasing as well as decreasing in it.
The bar graph illustrates the total
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in USD in the year 1960 to 2000.

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in 1960 to 1970 there was steady growth in the exporting of the
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agricultural
products. It rises from around 40
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billion
USD to around 70
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billion
USD. Then from 1970 to 1980 in there was a rapid increase in exporting the
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agricultural
products from around 70
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billion
USD 23 10
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billion
USD after that there was a steady fall from 1980 to mid of 1990 with
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exports
decreasing 250
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billion
USD. Then there was again rapid increase in the
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exports
from made of 1990 to
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end
of 1990. In 990 the
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exports
was increased
from
nearly
250
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billion
USD to more than 450
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billion
USD. From 1992 mid of 2006 boats was again
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increase
from 450 million USD to more than 600
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billion
USD. There was a steady decrease in the
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.
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it has overcome the loss and converted into the profit for more than 700
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USD till the ending of the year 2000.

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it
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us the
overall
information of the total
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export
of the
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agricultural
all over the world with their increasing
as well
as decreasing in it.

IELTS academic The bar graph below shows the total world agricultural export between year 1960 to 2000.

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