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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

In this graph, a vivid relationship is presented between people at age of sixty five and ove in certain range of years; from 1940 to 2040 in specific countries which are USA, Sweden and Japan. Overall, it is quit obvious that Japan is the most promising one where it climbed the ladder from the very bottom till it reached the highest per cent among the others. Furthermore, others ranges are fluctuating with an approximate similar starting and ending points. Firstly, Japan's population starts with only 5 percent in 1940 that faced a slight decline of level throughout the following years till it rose sharpely between 2020 and 2040 reaching more than 25 per cent. Secondly, Sweden experiences considerable fluctuations where values changed relatively from 7. 5 percent in 1940 until 25 per cent in 2040. Finaly, Even though USA proportion in 1940 was higher than that of Sweden, it ended up being at lower numbers in 2040.
In this graph, a vivid relationship
is presented
between
people
at age of
sixty five
and
ove
in certain range of years; from 1940 to 2040 in specific countries which are USA, Sweden and Japan.

Overall
, it
is quit
obvious that Japan is the most promising one where it climbed the ladder from the
very
bottom till it reached the highest per cent among the others.
Furthermore
, others ranges are fluctuating with an approximate similar starting and ending points.

Firstly
, Japan's population
starts
with
only
5 percent in 1940 that faced a slight decline of level throughout the following years till it rose
sharpely
between 2020 and 2040 reaching more than 25 per cent.

Secondly
, Sweden experiences considerable fluctuations where values
changed
relatively
from 7. 5 percent in 1940 until 25 per cent in 2040.

Finaly
,
Even though
USA proportion in 1940 was higher than that of Sweden, it ended up being at lower numbers in 2040.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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