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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries QLLgP
The line graph shows data about the proportion of elderly people aged 65 and over in three developed countries, namely, Japan, USA and Sweden, from 1940 to 2040. It is clear that the percentage of elderly people have increased in all three countries. The most noticeable trend is of Japan, where expectancy is predicted to rise considerable in the future. According to the chart, in 1940, the percentage of elderly people consisted of around 10% in the USA, while the proportion of Sweden people was less than 5%. The figure for Japan people decreased slightly about 2%, throughout this period. The USA and Sweden rose gradually over the 50 years, they reached around 15% in 1990. Turning to the rest of the period, the proportion of Japan people is predicted reaching about 27% in 2040. The percentage of Sweden elderly people will rise significantly of 25% while, USA population will increase substantially about 23% in 2040
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shows
data about the proportion of
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elderly
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people
aged 65 and over in three
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developed countries
,
namely
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Japan
, USA and Sweden, from 1940 to 2040.

It is
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clear
that the percentage of
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elderly
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people
have increased in all three countries. The most noticeable trend is of
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Japan
, where expectancy
is predicted
to rise considerable in the future.

According to the chart, in 1940, the percentage of
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elderly
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people
consisted of around 10% in the USA, while the proportion of Sweden
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people
was less than 5%. The figure for
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Japan
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people
decreased
slightly
about 2%, throughout this period. The USA and Sweden rose
gradually
over the 50 years, they reached around 15% in 1990.

Turning to the rest of the period, the proportion of
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Japan
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people
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is
predicted reaching about 27% in 2040. The percentage of Sweden
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elderly
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people
will rise
significantly
of 25% while, USA population will increase
substantially
about 23% in 2040
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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