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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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The given line chart illustrates the trends of the percentages of residents who aged 65 or more in America, Sweden and Japan from 1940 to 2040. In 1940, around 9% of Americans are over 65 years old, followed by Sweden, which figure is 7. 5%, and Japan (5%). Between 1940 and 1985, the proportion of both America and Sweden witnessed a constant growth while that of Japan, on the contrary, decreased from 5% to 3%. After 1985, the proportion of the USA remained roughly stable, fluctuate between 15% and 16% until 2018 but Sweden presented to rise from 13% to 20% before a slight decline. As for the future, Sweden is likely to show a rapid growth after 2025, from 18% to 25% in 2040. In the meantime, the USA would experience the same pace of growing. Looking at Japan, the proportion of people older than 65 is also predicted to boom, soar to 27% at the end of the period, which is 4 times more than the original figure. Overall, all three countries present an aging pattern in population in the period of 100 years, with Japan shows the most dramatic change as it used to has the last lowest percentage but end up with the highest, exceeds that of both the USA and Sweden.
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line chart illustrates the trends of the percentages of residents who aged 65 or more in America, Sweden and
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from 1940 to 2040.

In 1940, around 9% of Americans are over 65 years
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, followed by Sweden, which figure is 7. 5%, and
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(5%). Between 1940 and 1985, the proportion of both America and Sweden witnessed a constant growth while that of
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, decreased from 5% to 3%. After 1985, the proportion of the USA remained roughly stable, fluctuate between 15% and 16% until 2018
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Sweden presented to rise from 13% to 20%
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a rapid growth after 2025, from 18% to 25% in 2040. In the meantime, the USA would experience the same pace of growing. Looking at
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, the proportion of
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of the period, which is 4 times more than the original figure.

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, all three countries present an aging pattern in population in the period of 100 years, with
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Japan
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the most dramatic
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the last lowest percentage
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up with the highest, exceeds that of both the USA and Sweden.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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