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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. MJVq
The presented line graph shows the percent of the population since age 65 and over during the 1940 and 2040 in different countries. Generally, it can be clearly seen that, all of this three countries on the future will have the highest percentage of people elderly ages. Besides, one of countries like a Japan will have the most highest percent throughout hundred years. On the one hand, if we took two countries USA and Sweden, it would be seen that they are started on the similar places with the 2 percent differences. However, they are grown up to the middle in 1980. After that, they are started to fluctuate. For example, Sweden will a sharply rise, but USA will be leveled off. And the end, this two countries will a significantly increase to the 2040 year. On the other hand, Japan was sterted population in the 5 percent of the population. During the period of time, they are slightly dwindled to 3 %, however in 2020 they are a dramatically rised. Moreover, by 2040 they take the higher percentage of population aged 65 year and older.
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population
since age 65 and over during the 1940 and 2040 in
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different
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clearly
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seen
that, all of this three
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countries
on the future will have the highest percentage of
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people
elderly ages.
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, one of
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countries
like a Japan will have the
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most highest
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percent
throughout hundred years.

On the one hand, if we took two
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countries
USA and Sweden, it would be
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seen
that they are
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started
on the similar places with the 2
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percent
differences.
However
, they
are grown
up to the middle in 1980. After that, they are
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started
to fluctuate.
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, Sweden will a
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sharply rise
,
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but
USA will
be leveled
off. And the
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end
, this two
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countries
will a
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significantly increase
to the 2040 year.

On the other hand
, Japan was
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sterted
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population
in the 5
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population
. During the period of time, they are
slightly
dwindled to 3 %,
however
in 2020 they are a
dramatically
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rised
.
Moreover
, by 2040 they take the higher percentage of
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population
aged 65 year and older.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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