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The chart below shows the importance of green space to people in Englandin 2009 and the volume of visit to the natural environment in 2009-10 and 2010-11.

The pie chart illustrate the value of green space to the people of Britain in 2009 and the number of visits from 2009-2011 to natural environment. Overall, the green space is very important for maximum people, whereas maximum proportion of visitors was visited countryside. In contrast, only for few people it is not at all important and seaside coastline has least visitors. In detail, green space was very important to one third of people in England, whereas only for 1% people it was not important at all. Around 4% people say it was not very important and for 21% of Britishers it was fairly important. Furthermore, maximum number of people in England was visited countryside which was 53%, while a tiny fraction of English people visited seaside coastline. In addition, 30% more people went to green space in town as compared to the visit to seaside resort.
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visited seaside coastline.
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in town as compared to the visit to seaside resort.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the importance of green space to people in Englandin 2009 and the volume of visit to the natural environment in 2009-10 and 2010-11.

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