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The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The Visualized data depicts what proportion of people went to movies in an European country. It is obvious from the bar chart that it is categorized based on days in a week upon 3 different years. Overall, The percentage of people who spent Saturdays in cinemas huge in comparison to the other days throughout the three years. Whereas, the proportion of people being the lowest in 2003 but has encountered an slight rise at the 2007. Unlike other weekdays Friday has the highest percentage of people visiting the cinemas and its on par with the weekends. Even though in 2003 almost 23 % of people preferred Thursday for cinema it dropped quite significantly in 2005 and was around 18 % at 2007. On the other hand the Saturday with 40 % people in 2003 has raised to 45 % followed by a decline of 3 % by 2007. Although the percentage of people is less in comparison, Friday remained consistent throught all the 3 years without any variation at 30 % proportion.
The Visualized data depicts what proportion of
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European country. It is obvious from the bar chart that it
is categorized
based on days in a week upon 3
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different
years.

Overall
, The percentage of
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people
who spent Saturdays in cinemas huge
in comparison
to the other days throughout the three years. Whereas, the proportion of
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people
being the lowest in 2003
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but
has encountered
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an
slight rise at the 2007. Unlike other weekdays Friday has the highest percentage of
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people
visiting the cinemas and its on par with the weekends.

Even though
in 2003 almost 23 % of
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people
preferred Thursday for cinema it dropped quite
significantly
in 2005 and was around 18 % at 2007.
On the other hand
the Saturday with 40 %
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people
in 2003 has raised to 45 % followed by a decline of 3 % by 2007.

Although the percentage of
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is less
in comparison
, Friday remained consistent
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throught all
the 3 years without any variation at 30 % proportion.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days.

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