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The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999.

The graph illustrates the level of poverty amongst households in Ghana over a period of seven years i. e. from 1991/92 to 1998/99, grouped according to the access of refrigerator, electricity and water. Initially, most of the houses having access to electricity and water were non-poor with the percentage being 73% and 76% respectively whereas refrigerator did not have much effect on financial condition of household with only 24% of households being non-poor. In addition, 11%, 57% and 69% of households living under poor conditions had access to refrigerator, electricity and water respectively. However, 48% of households with availability of electricity were in very poor situations while 3% and 55% with refrigerator and water found themselves categorized as very poor. Over a period of seven years, the number of households categorized as non-poor accessing refrigerator, electricity and water substantially increased to 37%, 85% and 80% respectively. Although the percentage of very poor remained constant in case of refrigerator, it declined to 34% in case of electricity and showed a minor increment with regards to water. Similar observations were seen in case of poor households. Overall, the availability of electricity and water remained major factors in determining the financial status of households, however access to refrigerator did not make any major impact.
The graph illustrates the level of poverty amongst
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in Ghana over a period of seven years
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i. e.
from 1991/92 to 1998/99, grouped according to the
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access
of
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refrigerator
,
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electricity
and water.

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, most of the
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houses
having
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electricity
and
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water
were non-poor with the percentage being 73% and 76%
respectively
whereas
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refrigerator
did not have much effect on financial condition of
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household
with
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only
24% of
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being non-poor.
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households
living under
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poor
conditions had
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access
to
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refrigerator
,
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electricity
and
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water
respectively
.
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, 48% of
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households
with availability of
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electricity
were in
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very
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poor
situations while 3% and 55% with
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refrigerator
and
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water
found themselves categorized as
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very
poor.

Over a period of seven years, the number of
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categorized as non-poor accessing
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refrigerator
,
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electricity
and
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water
substantially
increased to 37%, 85% and 80%
respectively
. Although the percentage of
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poor
remained constant in case of
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refrigerator
, it declined to 34% in case of
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electricity
and
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showed
a minor increment
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with regards to
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water
. Similar observations were
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in case of
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poor
households.

Overall
, the availability of
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electricity
and
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water
remained major factors in determining the financial status of
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households
,
however
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access
to
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refrigerator
did not
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any major impact.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage of households, grouped by poverty, on the basis of access to refrigerator, electricity and water in Ghana for the year 1991/1992 to 1998/1999.

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