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The graph below shows the percentage of 18-25 years olds in universities in four different countries. Summarise the information by selelcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of 18-25 years olds in universities in four different countries. 5pXe
The provided multi line graph, compare four nations' younger age students proportion in university education during the period of half century, from 1961 to 2011. At the first glance, in all given nations, university education popularity had been increasing over the given period. In the first and last 5 year period, Thailand was on top level for youth's university education while, between the 1965 to 2006 Singapore had highest proportion university youth learners. According to the given data, in 1961 with around one quarter proportion of youth university students Thailand was on highest rank but in next following 30 years period it want down ant took on bottom at 20% in 1991. After 1991 with dramatic surge it recovered it's level ant again in 2011 at on peek with around 43% university's youth students. While in 1961 Singapore had just 15% youth university students which was doubled in next decade. From this level, with fluctuation it rose and reached on 40% level in following 40 years. With regards to, remaining nations, Malaysia had merely around 2% youth students in beginning of period which significant rise reached on 15% level until 1991 than stabilized on same level over the period. While Philippines had approximately 6% youth pupils in 1961, over the period those youth education level rose by thrice.
The provided multi line graph, compare four nations' younger age
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of half century, from 1961 to 2011.

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popularity had been increasing over the
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5 year
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, Thailand was on top
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for youth's
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education
while, between the 1965 to 2006 Singapore had
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data, in 1961 with around one quarter proportion of
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ant again in 2011 at on peek with around 43% university's
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.
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, with fluctuation it rose and reached on 40%
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in following 40 years.

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, remaining nations, Malaysia had
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youth
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in beginning of
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which significant rise reached on 15%
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until 1991 than stabilized on same
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over the
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.
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had approximately 6%
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pupils in 1961, over the
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those
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rose by thrice.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage of 18-25 years olds in universities in four different countries.

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