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The graph below shows the percentage change in places where students lived over five decades Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the percentage change in places where students lived over five decades aWqG
The graph indicates how students’ choices about places to live changed over centuries, from 1960s to 2000s. From a general consideration of the graph, it is evident that, while in 1960s there was not a great difference between the four types of accommodation, in 2000s the gap between them is much more marked. In particular, the number of students living in a shared house or in a flat with others has risen gradually since 1960s, until it reached a percentage of 70 in 2000s. By contrast, the number of students who have chosen to be paying guests with a host family has decreased rapidly and has became the lowest percentage of the graph. Moreover, the rate of students living in hall of residences has not always been steady: in 1960s, the percentage was around 15%, while in 1970s it rose a little and then fell back to 15% in 1980s; the same happened in 1990s and 2000s, when the number first increased and finally decreased. As for students staying at home with their family, there was a drop between 1960s and 1970s, then a steady percentage of 5 in the following two decades and a consequent growth in 2000s. Clearly, it is easy to have an idea about how students’ way of living changed over centuries by looking at the different types of accommodation they have chosen.
The graph indicates how
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students’
choices about places to
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live
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changed
over centuries, from 1960s to 2000s.

From a general consideration of the graph, it is evident that, while
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in 1960s
there was not a great difference between the four types of accommodation,
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in 2000s
the gap between them is much more marked.
In particular
, the number of
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students
living in a shared
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house
or in a flat with others has risen
gradually
since 1960s, until it reached a
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percentage
of 70
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in 2000s
.

By contrast, the number of
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students
who have chosen to be paying guests with a host family has decreased
rapidly
and has
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became
the lowest
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percentage
of the graph.

Moreover
, the rate of
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students
living in hall of residences has not always been steady:
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in 1960s
, the
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percentage
was around 15%, while
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in 1970s
it rose a
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little
and then fell back to 15%
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in 1980s
; the same happened
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in 1990s
and 2000s, when the number
first
increased and
finally
decreased.

As for
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students
staying at home with their family, there was a drop between 1960s and 1970s, then a steady
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percentage
of 5 in the following two decades and a consequent growth
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in 2000s
.

Clearly
, it is easy to have an
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idea
about how
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students’
way of living
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changed
over centuries by looking at the
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different
types of accommodation they have chosen.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the percentage change in places where students lived over five decades

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