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The bar graph demonstrates the annual percentage-wise growth rates in the Gross Domestic Product for the three nations over the period of four years which was from 2007 to 2010.

The bar graph demonstrates the annual percentage-wise growth rates in the Gross Domestic Product for the three nations over the period of four years which was from 2007 to 2010. Qg81
The bar graph demonstrates the annual percentage-wise growth rates in the Gross Domestic Product for the three nations over the period of four years which was from 2007 to 2010. Overall, it can be explicitly observed that Tunisia witnessed a downward trend, whilst Japan a positive trend; meanwhile, rates fluctuated for Ecuador. In 2010, Japan’s growth level was highest similar to the Tunisia’level in 2007, albeit starting from the bottom. Comparing 2007 to 2008, Tunisia, being highest in 2007, declined drastically from nearly 6% to 4. 5 %, whereas rates were doubled for Japan, which started at the bottom from only 2%; likewise, figures soared for Ecuador, from more than 3% to less than 5%. From the subsequent year, a drop in values of Tunisia was observed with remained at the plateau in the latter year as well. , while they rose steadily for Japan, namely, one percent each year. In contrast to that, they plummeted from about 5% to more than 1% in 2009 then rose twice in 2010
The bar graph demonstrates the annual percentage-wise growth rates in the Gross Domestic Product for the three nations over the period of four years which was from 2007 to 2010.

Overall
, it can be
explicitly
observed that Tunisia witnessed a downward trend, whilst
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Japan
a
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positive
trend; meanwhile, rates fluctuated for Ecuador. In 2010,
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Japan’s
growth level was
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similar to the Tunisia’level in 2007, albeit starting from the bottom.

Comparing 2007 to 2008, Tunisia, being highest in 2007, declined
drastically
from
nearly
6% to 4. 5 %, whereas rates
were doubled
for
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Japan
, which
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started
at the bottom from
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only
2%;
likewise
, figures soared for Ecuador, from more than 3% to less than 5%.

From the subsequent
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year
, a drop in values of Tunisia
was observed
with remained at the plateau in the latter
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year
as well
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,
while they rose
steadily
for
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Japan
,
namely
, one percent each
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year
.
In contrast
to that, they plummeted from about 5% to more than 1% in 2009 then rose twice in 2010
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IELTS academic The bar graph demonstrates the annual percentage-wise growth rates in the Gross Domestic Product for the three nations over the period of four years which was from 2007 to 2010.

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