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The graph below shows the oil production (in barrels)in several African countries from 2000 to 2004.

The graph below shows the oil production (in barrels)in several African countries from 2000 to 2004. XdmA
The information about the oil is produced (in barrels) in some African regions: Nigeria, Chad, Congo Brazaville and Cote d'ivoire over the period of four years from 2000, is illustrated by the assigned table chart. Overall, it can be explicitly observed that Nigerians produced the highest amount of oil in all the years. However, oil production in Chad and Cote d'ivoire increased, it fell in Congo Brazaville and fluctuated in Nigeria. To begin with, there was no oil production in Chad from 2000 to 2002, but in 2003, Chad produced about 50, 000 barrels. In chad Oil production rose sharply and reached 290, 000 barrels in 2004. Likewise, fuel production grew gradually from 8, 000 to 45, 000 in Cote d'ivoire between 2000 and 2004 respectively. Probing further, In 2000, 280, 000 barrels of fuel were produced in Cargo Brazaville, and its production fell by 10, 000-20, 000 barrels year by year and arrived at 205, 000 barrels in 2004. There was a modest increase in production of oil in Nigeria from 2, 000, 000 to 2, 100, 000 barrels in 2000 and 2001. While, oil production dropped slightly at 1, 900, 000 barrels in 2002, it rose from 2, 100, 000 to 2, 200, 000 barrels in Nigeria till 2004.
The information about the
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oil
is
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produced
(in
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barrels)
in
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some
African regions: Nigeria, Chad, Congo
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Brazaville
and
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Cote d'ivoire
over the period of four years from 2000,
is illustrated
by the assigned table chart.

Overall
, it can be
explicitly
observed that Nigerians
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produced
the highest amount of
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oil
in all the years.
However
,
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oil
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production
in Chad and
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Cote d'ivoire
increased, it fell in Congo
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Brazaville
and fluctuated in Nigeria.

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begin
with, there was no
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oil
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production
in Chad from 2000 to 2002,
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but
in 2003, Chad
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produced
about 50, 000
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barrels
. In chad
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Oil
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production
rose
sharply
and reached 290, 000
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barrels
in 2004.
Likewise
, fuel
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production
grew
gradually
from 8, 000 to 45, 000 in
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Cote d'ivoire
between 2000 and 2004
respectively
.

Probing
further
, In 2000, 280, 000
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barrels
of fuel were
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produced
in Cargo
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Brazaville
, and its
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production
fell by 10, 000-20, 000
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barrels
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year
by
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year
and arrived at 205, 000
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barrels
in 2004. There was a modest increase in
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production
of
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oil
in Nigeria from 2, 000, 000 to 2, 100, 000
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barrels
in 2000 and 2001. While,
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oil
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production
dropped
slightly
at 1, 900, 000
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barrels
in 2002, it rose from 2, 100, 000 to 2, 200, 000
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barrels
in Nigeria till 2004.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the oil production (in barrels)in several African countries from 2000 to 2004.

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