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The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present.

The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth School from 2006 to the present. wlLd
The graph illustrates some information about one of the libraries in the Starmouth School. There are two trends in the quantities of students who read books differed by gender between 2009 and 2012. According to the diagram, between 2009 and 2010, there has been a slight increase in book numbers readers by males from 50 to 80. Numbers have risen gradually to 100 since 2011. Whereas, there has been a significantly sharp fall to 80, in 2012. However, there have seen different trends among boys and girls in this chart. The number of book readers by girls has increased steadily from 2009 to 2010 in the same way as boys, whereas it has grown distinctly to 100 between 2010 and 2011. Conversely of boy's data, there have been remarkably increasing after 2011 which there had been in an exact number. Overall, there has been an extreme upward trend in books which are read by female students. Even though male students read more books in 2009 and 2010, but finally, they fell to 80 which is lower than the girls in 2012.
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School. There are two trends in the quantities of students who read
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differed by gender between 2009 and 2012.

According to the diagram, between 2009 and 2010, there has been a slight increase in
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book
numbers readers by males from 50 to 80. Numbers have risen
gradually
to 100 since 2011. Whereas, there has been a
significantly
sharp fall to 80, in 2012.

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trends among boys and girls in this chart. The number of
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readers by girls has increased
steadily
from 2009 to 2010
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to 100 between 2010 and 2011.
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of boy's data, there have been
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Overall
, there has been an extreme upward trend in
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in 2009 and 2010,
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, they fell to 80 which is lower than the girls in 2012.
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